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People no longer use newspapers and television because the Internet plays the same role. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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In general, it is clear from the maps that the data about how often people have fast
food
 in 3 years: 2003, 2006, 2013 are used to compare in
this
 diagram. One interesting thing is that most people in
USA
Suggestion
the USA
 went to fast
food
 restaurants once a week between 2003 and 2006, and once or twice a month in 2013. The proportion of people eating fast
food
 daily experienced the lowest number in all three years. For more details, there is more than a
third
 population of America ate fast
food
 once a week in 2003 and 2006 and the percentage of people in 2006 witness a
slightly
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slight
 increase compared to its in 2003. But the number drop to just nearly 27% in 2013.
In contrast
, in the period-3 year from 2003 to 2006, the proportion of people who ate fast
food
 once or twice a month decrease slightly by 5%
then
 grow to around 33% in 2013. The percentage of people who had several meals of fast
food
 a week fluctuated between 16% and 20%. It is higher than the rate of people had a few times a year. The number of fast
food
 eaters
daily and
Accept comma addition
daily, and
 people who never eat fast
food
 was a very small percentage, it
was
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has been
 just under 5%
in
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at
 all times.
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