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Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowladge or experiance

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Constructing magnificent buildings are significant for many of the countries because these sorts of buildings show the status of these countries in the world.
Furthermore
, constructing impressive buildings help promote tourism.
On the other hand
, constructing public buildings
such
 as hospitals, schools, theatres are vital. Most of the development, wealthy and developing countries have many effectual buildings. These countries owe their wealth to these impressive buildings in a way because when people travel somewhere, they want to visit gorgeous buildings, and they want to spend their time in these kinds of places or buildings.
Besides
, they want to spend their since people like attractive things and they want to have some memories with these places. What is more,
such
 sort of travels contributes to the economy of the countries which have some interesting, gorgeous and multitasking buildings. I think that the authorities should invest in
such
 buildings.
However
, governments have to support their citizen with public building as well because public buildings are a fundamental priority for people. It is a duty of any social state.
Moreover
, countries which have some economic concerns can earn money with these public buildings or places.
For example
, if countries have some fully-equipped hospitals or quality schools, many people want to visit and want to take advantage of the service of these buildings. Health tourism or well-known schools and universities are good examples for them. I think these kind of investments are like hitting two birds with one stone.
Likewise
, In my country, some of the city hospitals are fully-equipped with high technologies,
also
 including some stores, beauty shop and living spaces.
Therefore
, some people, especially foreigners want to be treated in these hospitals, and the number of
such
 people is increasing day by day.
This
 practice not only meets the needs of people, but
also
 contributes to the economy of countries. I support these sort of logical investments. Overall, In my opinion, the countries which spend their money in public places like hospitals or schools are more advantageous than countries which are investing in impressive buildings.
Likewise
, countries should
also
 ensure that they have some effectual and attractive buildings, as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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