Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

As
a
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human
being
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beings
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, we should do whatever it takes to protect our ecosystem. Some people ponder that our society is putting more attention and resources than required for
protection
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the protection
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of wild animals and birds.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
view and the reasons for that will be explained in the following paragraph
To begin
with, in the current situation, we do need to put a lot more light
to
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the issue
such
as illegal poaching. Interfering with the natural food chain has shown
worst
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the worst
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repercussion
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repercussions
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in the past.
For example
, famine condition in
china
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China
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arises
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arose
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after 1925
due to
killing
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the killing
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of birds, which
use
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to eat
pest
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pests
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from the crops. After
putting
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laws and highlighting issues for the sake of the animal kingdom, still we hear news like the killing of rhinos
due to
their horn.
Hence
, there is no
such
thing
like
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more attention to
this
topic.
In addition
, a bunch of people opine that too many resources are given to safeguarding animals.
However
, compared to the amount of damage done by the
industrial revolution
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and
growing
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the growing
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population in nature, these investments are like a drop of water in the ocean.
For instance
, the building of roads and dam projects results in
wiping
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the wiping
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of large areas of forest.
Therefore
, it is not right to say that we are putting lots of money for their safety. We are reciprocating what we took in the past from them.
To sum up
, needless to say
that
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human has done more harm to speechless creatures and now it’s our responsibility to cover up for the mistake
done
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by our past generation and make
this
world a better place to live
Submitted by Nikita Mathur on

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Task Response
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the position or opinion on the given topic
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the coherence by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between sentences
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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