There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both sides.

Serious
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The serious crime rate
crime
rate has been increasing year by year. Some people believe that the death penalty should be considered in order to discourage these crimes.
However
, others think that different measures should be taken in consideration. I will discuss both views below, before arriving at a conclusion. One the one hand, considering death penalty as a possibility of conviction could definitely act as a dissuasive method to lower serious
crime
rate, as it has a tremendous psychological effect.
For instance
, its impossibility of being appealed in court could constitute an effective psychological barrier that would help serious crimes to be avoided. Another consideration about capital punishment is that it attacks the problem by eliminating the offender, which could be considered as a guarantee of non recidivism.
On the other hand
,
society
should not consider to rely solely on dissuasive methods, but to address the root of the problem. Recent studies indicate that one of the most important aspects of individuals who commit serious
crime
is
the low
Suggestion
lower
or non-existent academic education, leading that to the impossibility of applying for formal jobs.
Thus
, a good way of preventing crimes from its very origin, would be to give the opportunity of those potential criminals to be educated and integrated into the
society
through formal employment. In conclusion,
although
dissuasive methods would help to lower
crime
rates, it would not address the underlying problem associated to integrate individuals to
society
.
Therefore
, considering alternate measures
such
as the described above would be more beneficial for USE SYNONYMS
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Society
.
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