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Transporting large amount of food to richer countries from developing world is having an impact on air pollution and climate change. Some people say such imports should therefore be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Nowadays, the world has become too much connected. Goods are transported all over the globe.
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,
air
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pollution
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 and climate change can be increased, when a large amount of
food
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 is transported.
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, some people think that developed countries should reduce the process of importing
food
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 from poorer countries. In my opinion, I totally disagree about the reduction of
food
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 Transportation. The world may suffer if
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 kind of reduction is activated. Developing countries, mainly depend on the money comes from selling
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 type of product. Reducing the importation may force some countries to face financial problem.
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, Sudan has around 46 % of its income from exporting
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 to Saudi Arabia and the gulf area.
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, some countries are not able to produce their own
food
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. These countries, which have no enough space to farm must get
food
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 from other places.
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, the reduction can bring different types of issues to both sides of the equation. Indeed, the world must deal with many
pollution
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 causes to handle
air
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pollution
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 and climate. Plants are considered as the main cause of
air
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pollution
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. According to a recent study, 45% of
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pollution
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 is due to industrial activities.
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, the emitted cars' smoke plays a significant role in the case of climate change because of the number of cars.
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, only Cairo has around 30 million cars that pollute the
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.
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, many steps can be taken before deciding to decrease
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 importation. To conclude, I believe that
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 transporting has to be normally done.
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 guarantees
food
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 for rich counties and money for developing countries. The
pollution
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 issues can be solved by looking at the real factor of the problem.

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