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Some people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, and others prefer to change their jobs from time to time. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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Having a
job
 is one of our essential matter to maintain the life.
Thus
, settling down at the similar
job
 and discovering the new
job
have been
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has been
is
 a hot debatable issue these days. Both
side
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sides
has
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have
 some pros and cons to make people satisfied
of
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with
 their life. Several
aspect
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aspects
 of both
way
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ways
will be discuss
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will be discussed
 in detail below and my opinion will be revealed in the concluding part. The reason why people should work
at
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in
 the familiar field is that they can be benefited which has more trustworthy. Most of the people have been having a tough
time
 to develop the good connection at work. At the beginning of
new company
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the new company
a new company
new companies
, employees have to deal with
new environment
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the new environment
a new environment
 and get close with other coworkers, after overcome
this
 period, each other would be
more close
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closer
 and have
more deep relationship
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a deeper relationship
deeper relationship
deeper relationships
. It means that coworkers could help and teach through their reliability. Despite the several positive
result
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results
 of
maintain
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maintaining
 the same
job
 area, there is the opinion that moving to
new
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a new job
the new job
job
 is the great way to find a high quality of life. When employees find a new opportunities, it would be a good
time
 to negotiate their value
instead
 of stuck in a same company for many years. According to an article that I recently read, a man, who is 35 years old, got an offer which including better salary and benefit from a starter company where needs the support who has experiences.
Moreover
, switch the
job
time
 to
time
 would
also
 have the chance to learn new skills and advanced their own knowledge. According to the factors outlined above, one can conclude that the even though working at
same place
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the same place
 has a variety of merits, workers can have more opportunities working
in
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on
with
 several types of
job
. People should carefully consider the value of each setting.
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