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In many countries is a widening gap between the rich and the poor

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At the turn of the 21st century, the wealth is increasing, but the poor are going deep into debts in many countries. The developed countries,
such
 as Turkey, USA, Russia,
have
Suggestion
has
 the biggest gap between the rich and the poor. One of the main problem to
this
 is education. Nowadays quality study has become very expensive. There are a lot of schools, colleges and universities, which are very costly to pay and the poor
can not
can not
cannot
 pay for it. Due to
this
, these people are not able to complete high educations to work in
hugh
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
 and well-paid job. Another problem is that, people are different. The rich work hard to live in a luxurious life, and they think about their future.
the
Suggestion
The
 poor are live only with todays life. Fortunately, there are two solutions.
First
 of all, the government
shoul
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
shall
 ensure learning and employment opportunities should be given to poor.
Secondly
, governments should provide financial support for people, who are living under uncomfortable circumstances. To conclude, I believe that we as a human everyone has right to get an access to the education and a quality life.
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