People sleep less than they use to in the past. What do you think the reason behind this? What are the effects on them?

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At present generation peoples don't sleep for long hours, as they use to in the old days. In
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Now a day's it is like a race, everyone wants to get ahead of each other and to do so they tend to do many things and don't care about them self.
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, In a survey, In U.S when peoples were asked that if they get holiday what they will do and most of them answer, saying they will still like to work on that day to earn some extra cash. Due, to
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many people are affected. People tend to forget that sleeping is
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important in their life.In old days there were no
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things and people use to enjoy their life more
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of spending long hours in
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. Due to which they had a long and healthy life as they don't tend to stick in one
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they use to go out and do other activities and sleep for at least 8 hours which is rare to see now in working peoples.
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, Sharemarket plays a major role in
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, due to different time zones and market opening hours peoples in different part of the world tend to awake for long hours or sleep for very few hours, they neglect that it affects their mind, even peoples do part time to achieve success, but
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if achieving their goal and becoming successful, they harm their health.
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, people working in
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for long hours and when going back home late night they might fall sleep while driving, or due to becoming tensed they loses the ability to think right and the right moment.Their capability to react to think becomes dull. To summarize
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companies should have strict rules or closing hours of
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and provide workers with holidays where they are not allowed to work so that keep their mind cool and off the workload and not only that there should be seminars where they get the knowledge of how important is sleeping and how it can affect them if they are not having proper sleep.
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can overcome the barrier and keep people healthy and fit which can overall help them to become a better person and help organizations grow.
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