The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Mankind in
future
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will be having more health issue as
comparable
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compared
to the recent time. I totally agree with the given notion.
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, the essay will depict about the causes of the medical care.
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, it will elicit the consequences which can be there in later years.
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with, it is very well said that peoples' well-being will influence in
future
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. It's because of consuming junk foods, lack of dieting schedule and much more. Fast food is a main key to becoming unhealthier.
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, human knows that eating
such
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street food can risk their life. Along with that, doing exercise can be a string to become healthier.
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, Sports stars do not eat delicious fast foods,
also
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they do exercise which makes them fit and well-shaped.
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, they take vitamin pills for being a healthier individual.
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, the pros of not following the healthy activities like sleeping, eating
,
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workloads can affect the well-being of a person in
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future
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the future
.
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, it is a fact that not taking sufficient sleep can affect the Brain
cortex which
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cortex, which
can change a
person
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person's
behaviour, which can cause mental illness later. Obtaining junk food can harm a
person
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person's
body organ which can be
elicits
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elicited
organ diseases in
future
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.
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, consuming wine can cause a kidney failure.
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And
recently it is noted that in the world most selling products is wine and drugs, which can be make an individual health lower by the time passes. To conclude, it is proved that people can suffer
more later
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later
years if their health care won’t not be maintained.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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