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Now the machine is very complex , and a lot of difficult work is automated . Does this machine automation have more pros than cons ?

#machine #work #automation
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Modern technology has equipped us with machines
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 which are working like robots
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 There are positive and negative effects of these machines on the individual and the society
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 Overall the pros outweigh the cons
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 On the positive side
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 machines are faster
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 more convenient and energy saving
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 Households and industries are much facilitated with machines
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 Personal use of machines gives people more free time to spend with family and pursue hobbies
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 industrial use of machines
reduce
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reduces
 manpower for
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 and
increses
become bigger or greater in amount
increases
increase
 output
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 In the words of Oscar Wild - On
machanical
using (or as if using) mechanisms or tools or devices
mechanical
 slavery
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 " on the slavery of the
machine
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 the future of the world depends"
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 computer machines or robots manage our banks and even the tickets at
airport
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the airport
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machine _ robot
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a machine _ robot
machine _ robots
the machine _ robot
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 The computerization certainly relieves humans from
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dull, repetitive
 tasks without any human error
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 What is more
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 robotic surgeries and eye operations can be better done with the help of robotic surgeons
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 On the negative side
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 machines reduce the need of manual
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 which can lead to
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empolyment
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
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 insufficient knowledge of equipment handling and
operating
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operation
 is detrimental to
un educated
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an educated
uneducated
 workers and they end up getting injuries or disabilities while working with it
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 Technical failures can
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disturbe
move deeply
disturb
disturbed
distribute
 the whole working system and lead to losses
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 health can be
detoriated
so badly formed or out of shape as to be ugly
distorted
decorated
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make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of
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 to sedentary
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lifestyle, especially
 housewives who
relay
have confidence or faith in
rely
 heavily on these for household chores
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 Machines are a failure where creative
work
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 is required
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 machines cannot reproduce the unique and
orginal
preceding all others in time or being as first made or performed
original
work
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 done by many artisans
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 It has been rightly said that a
machine
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 can do the
work
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 of a thousand ordinary men
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 but no
machine
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 can do the
work
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 of one extraordinary man
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 Overall
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 the advantages of machines
outwiegh
be heavier than
outweigh
 the disadvantages on the individual and
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
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 in order to meet the employment needs of the population
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 a balance has to be maintained between manual
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 and mechanization
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