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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagrees and think that the host country should welcome culture differences. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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It is often
debatable
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debated
 whether tourists should follow local customs and behaviour or
country
 should be acceptable to
culture
 differences. From my point of view both habitants and visitors should respect each other and avoid situations which could lead to some tensions, disrespect or conflicts.
This
 essay has tried to cover both of views and will suggest a solution for
this
 hot-button issue.
First
 group who
argue
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argues
 that visitors have to follow
traditions
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the traditions
 of the
host
country
 believe that introducing of foreign
culture
 can have serious consequences for the local people
.
Accept space
.
For example
, in Islamic countries wearing a revealing dress or displaying emotions in public
such
 as love, kissing will be considered as disrespect of
country
Accept comma addition
country, culture
culture
 due to
such
 behaviour will have influence on personal development of indigenous people and
thus
 will
distroy
do away with, cause the destruction or undoing of
destroy
 some local customs in the future. I believe
this
actions
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action
 can be avoided by tourists without effort. But the other group of people argue that
host
country
 should welcome
culture
 differences and there are two good reasons for that.
Firstly
,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
 can learn local people new things and it can be helpful. Indigenous people can use the advantage of new
culture
 and
impact
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the impact
 it on their own.
For example
,
japanese
of or relating to or characteristic of Japan or its people or their culture or language
Japanese
 food is very popular in many countries and many restaurants of special foods are opened by local people.
Secondly
, it is really hard for travellers to follow local customs and behaviour because they are totally different and
therefore
 they are not able to adapt to the local traditions. If indigenous people welcome tourists'
culture
, they will visit the
country
 again. Correspondingly, the economy of
host
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the host country
country
 will be increased. In conclusion, I believe that most of
tourists
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the tourists
 are conscious and are able to understand some significant rules in
host
country
 and follow them as well as many indigenous people can respect
other foreign
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the other foreign culture
culture
 and both of sides will avoid conflicts and
become benefit to
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become a benefit to
 each other.
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