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Todays high sales of popular consumar goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which thy are sold.

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The topic which state that today's high sales of popular
consumar
a person who uses goods or services
consumer
 good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they ate
sold
food mixtures either arranged on a plate or tossed and served with a moist dressing; usually consisting of or including greens
salad
 which is
controversial one
Suggestion
a controversial one
the controversial one
, One the one hand, today's the high sales of popular
consumar
a person who uses goods or services
consumer
consumers
consume
 the products by popular celebrities and attractive offers. One the other hand, today's buyer's are very smart who
are not influence
Suggestion
is not influenced
is not influencing
 by any attractive offers. Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the street. Some people think that the advertising boost the sales of goods and encourage people to buy product unnecessarily. In my country
,
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,
 many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous actress or popular
person especially
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person, especially
 youngster easily influenced by advertisement buy products which is really not necessary. In
the addi
the form in which a text (especially a printed book) is published
edition
tion
of digitaliza
the administration of digitalis for the treatment of certain heart disorders
digitalisation
tion
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