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Behaviour in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

#behaviour #schools #effects
In Modern era schools play a vital role
for
Suggestion
in
 the education system. Causes of bad
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 could be many,
for example
: discipline of students which can be controlled by school rules and parents support. Family attitude. Have a heavy effect on
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in school, either poor or wealthy family both have an effect on student
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and it can be controlled by changing the family functionality and system Larges classes are a problem as well, where it is difficult for teachers to teach and make the content understandable for pupils. These types of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 can be sorted out by splitting the number of students in two or more class sections to have the specific range of students. I would
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consider or describe as similar, equal, or analogous
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 conclude by saying
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 can be cause and solutions are all related to mind setting, if you have positive thinking so
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 will be positive too.
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