You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
letter in regards to allowing us for practising in the community hall for music
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which is being stopped due to orders. As we practise in the evening. I am Kim a member of
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musician party, we made
this
group to help young children to learn music when they get stressed out from their long hectic study schedule. Despite
that
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we are
professional
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musician
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and perform in many events and functions. Our main purpose to practice in society is to provide free music classes and anyone can join that free of cost. If you allow us to practice in the community hall,
then
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our group and children too. We can adjust according to your convenience as you schedule the time and days. I hope you understand our concern and give us positive feedback regarding
this
matter. Yours faithfully, Kim
Submitted by Ritu Joshi on

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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