You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

#part #group #musicians #tuesday #friday #evenings #practise #community #hall #manager

Dear Manager, I am writing

this

letter in regards to allowing us for practising in the community hall for music

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which is being stopped due to orders. As we practise in the evening. I am Kim a member of

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musician party, we made

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group to help young children to learn music when they get stressed out from their long hectic study schedule. Despite

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we are

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musician

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and perform in many events and functions. Our main purpose to practice in society is to provide free music classes and anyone can join that free of cost. If you allow us to practice in the community hall,

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our group and children too. We can adjust according to your convenience as you schedule the time and days. I hope you understand our concern and give us positive feedback regarding

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matter. Yours faithfully, Kim

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in additional
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for example
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therefore
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although
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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

149 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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