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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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In today's modern era, digital media play a vital role in inducing the customers to buy a product with the help of advertisement.
On the other hand
 it
also
 creates awareness about the changing trend. So, I partially agreed with both the statements and so does the essay will discuss the highlights of both the points that how it encourages an individual to buy thing not in need as well if it helps to improve our lifestyle. As we know that digital market is the key for the producers or manufacturers to showcase their product in a unique way so that an individual just have an option to buy that particular product even if he /she does not need at a moment.
For instance
, usually males develop an interest in upgrading their smartphone even if the existing one is working properly.
This
 happens generally due to impact of ads.
On the contrary
, it
also
 helps in creating awareness among the general public on the usage of stuff.
For instance
, as we are going through a tough situation of corona virus, world health organisation had recommended using the Sanitizers with the alcohol content present in it. Earlier in many countries, people were not aware of
this
 fact, but just due to an effective advertisement it was possible to inform them about it.
Although
 many companies showcase
this
 fact by adopting their products only, but it is still in the public interest. In the nutshell, I would say that we should buy the products which improve our lifestyles if not, at present, but will do in future even we have to pay the extra pennies for it.
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