Nowadays families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to it. Why is this happening? Do the advantage of this threat outweigh the drawbacks?

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Families have a lack of bonding in relationship as compared with old days and
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situation is highly accepted in the society.
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threat before pointing towards its positive or negative
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a plethora
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is busy lifestyle of now-a-day generation people. In today's
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, mostly both
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parents
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, nowadays generation is highly engaged in
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. Whenever they feel free they use digital gadgets for passing time
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of sitting near their loved ones.
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a predominant factor
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has many negative impacts. As bonding between relationship are breaking dramatically, it could be very dangerous. As many children are engaged in
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they could be mislead and manipulated by many strangers. In present
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there is considerable increase in percentage of mental health because of no comfort and love. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that
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a genuine belief
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