Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that develop the mind, such as reading and doing crossword puzzles. Other feel that it is important to give one`s mind a rest in leisure time. Discuss

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Many people are in favour of

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the significance

of using spare

time

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for mental activities like reading and doing crossword puzzles while others are convinced that it is vital to relax during spare

time

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. I believe that human should spend spare

time

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for

activities improving

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activities, improving

the

mind

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but without forgetting about

mind

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relaxing. There are two magnificent benefits to use leisure

time

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for

mind

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developing

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developer

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of all, activities

such

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a reading books can broaden people`s knowledge which can be helpful in the future.

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brain

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the brain

is trained by intellect

games

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games, hence

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, it protects against Alzheimer`s disease.

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, people can save their long-term memory for years to come. But

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human body

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the human body

is not

machine

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a machine

and it needs to be relaxed,

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brain,

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it can lead to serious health problems. 24hours use of

mind

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can cause stress.

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, giving rest to

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mind revitalize

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mind, revitalize

it, helps to think better. In conclusion, I believe that if people use spare

time

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for mental activities, they will remain

health

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healthy

for years to come but everything is good in moderation.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

179 words

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