Some systems require students to speacialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school? What are the benefits of two education systems and what is better ?

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The given pie chart
depict
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depicts
the data of UAE government expenditures in the year of 2000. It is stated that the overall budget was 315 million
AED
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. It is clear from the graph that the almost half of moneys spending goes to social security by (
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100
bilion
the number that is represented as a one followed by 9 zeros
billion
) and health and personal social services by
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(
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53
Bilion
the number that is represented as a one followed by 9 zeros
billion
).
In addition
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,
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,
it
it is
it's
followed by education expenditure by
AED
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38
billion
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,
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,
and other expenditure an
dept
relatively deep or strong; affecting one deeply
deep
debt
interest has the same number of expenditure
money
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by
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23
billion
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.
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then
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Then
it
it is
it's
followed by
defense
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the defence
defence
a defence
which
money
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goes
to
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in
this
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sector by
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22
billion
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.
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besides
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Besides
,
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,
law and order and hosing heritage and
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
were
noted
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noting
that the
money
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spending on them
are ranged
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have ranged
range
from 15 to 17
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aed
a public promotion of some product or service
ad
at
and
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.
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also
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, it is obvious that
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that goes to the transportation
cateogry
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
category
is the least among all public
sectors
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sector
expenditures.
overall
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Overall
, they are differences and
vitiates in
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vitiates, in
government
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that spending on all public infrastructures and sectors
.
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.
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