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Now-a-days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away ,whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time . Why has this change happened ? What are the effects of this change ?

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In
earlier time
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earlier times
an earlier time
, people had a
habbit
an established custom
habit
 of repairing and
re using
use again after processing
reusing
 items
instead
 of throwing them away
,
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 whereas
,
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,
this
 preference has reformed now as we dispose them off easily
instead
 of getting them repaired and using them again
.
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This
 essay will
firstly
 discuss the reasons for
this
change
 and in the latter half
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 will exhibit how these changes are
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
 us
.
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 To start with
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 the major reason for
this
 transformation is easy availability of items in the markets. As time has passed away numerous
market
 zones have increased
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,
as a result
 of
increase
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the increase
increases
 in import
,
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,
 export and manufacturing
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Thus
 items are available
varioous
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
varies
 varieties and different qualities giving more options to the buyer,
Moreover people
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Moreover, people
 have more disposable income and easy options to buy things from the
market
 than earlier time.
For Example
 easy availability of loans on cars and attractive models make people curious to
change
 their car very often may be in 3 years on contrary consumers used to
change
 it in 7-8 years
.
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 In regards to the
effexct
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 of
this
change
 there are both negative and positive sides. On a positive note
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demand of products is on high scale which ultimately boosts up the manufacturing industry
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 As demand
rises supply
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rises, supply
 will increase and more money will flow in
market
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the market
a market
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thus
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economy
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the economy
 will grow
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To exemplify
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 demand of smart phones is on rise now-a-days and
thus
 various brands are emerging in
market
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the market
a market
 which directly contributes
in
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to
 the economical growth
.
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On the other hand
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,
this
change
 is creating pollution, as various raw material
are
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is
 non biodegradable which contaminates our environment.. To conclude
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 there are various evident reasons for
this
change
 that people are not recycling products, but it has both pros and cons on end users
that is
Human
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the Human
 Being.
Submitted by Shweta Sirohi on

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