Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is my belief that companies need to be more flexible with their
dress
-codes for people who work in back-office and mid-office positions. The growth of start-up companies all over the world started a new trend in the market that: employees would work better if they wear more comfortable clothes. At
first
,
this
was not considered by major companies, but a few years later, with
start-ups
the act of setting in operation
startups
startup
startups'
becoming billion dollar brands, most companies
rethinked
change one's mind
rethought
their
dress
-code for persons in back-office and middle-office in order to increase productivity and to retain talented employees. It is
proved
Suggestion
proven
that people feel
more happy
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happier
and engaged when they can
dress
as themselves.
However
, a smart
dress
-code should not be enjoyed by all the departments of the company. Would you buy a
Dialisis
separation of substances in solution by means of their unequal diffusion through semipermeable membranes
dialysis
machine of a salesperson dressed in
swetpants
loose-fitting trousers with elastic cuffs; worn by athletes
sweatpants
?
Accept space
?
The answer is no. Employees who have contact with customers can not forget that they are the company representatives and
therefore
they need to
dress
accordingly
to the image of the company. For a salesperson, or even a bank manager, the image presented to the clients it is more important than their negotiation and problem-solving skills. In summary, I believe that people who
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
personal contact with
company´s clients
Suggestion
the company´s clients
can
dress
in a less formal way, whereas salesperson and employees whose work directly in contact with customers need to
dress
following the company´s guidelines.
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