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Some people think older employees are more useful to a company, some people believe younger employees are more useful in modern society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there is a different point of view about to keep older employees or to hire younger employees. Some people say that older employees are better and more useful than the younger ones. In
this
 essay, I will give my opinion of both views.
First
 and foremost, we all know that younger employees are faster to understand new things than the older ones.
Moreover
, younger know better how to use technology
such
 as a computer or a mobile phone and they know how to send emails and all the technology stuff that a
company
 need to use.
Furthermore
, younger are
also
 more motivated to work than the older employees because of them is all new. Younger people have more idea and their way of thinking is different from the older people. They can do cool projects and presentations thanks to their technology knowledges. On the other hands, if we pay attention to every single
company we
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company, we
 know that the bosses trust more older people than the younger.
This
 is because the older know everything about the
company
 and their work.
Moreover if
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Moreover, if
 the employees are older they are known better from their bosses. In my own opinion, I think younger are more useful to a
company
 than the older ones. The world is in constant change and evolution and in my opinion
also
 the companies must behave in the same way. To conclude, the different companies in the world have to hire younger than to keep the elder people.
This
 because the younger people have more qualities than the older ones.
Submitted by ALEXIA MARTIS on

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