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It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history tham world history To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For school students studying local
history
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 more essential than world
history
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.I personally agree with
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 statement due to some reasons.Young learners
should be learn
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should learn
 their own
history
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 in order to know their past. National
history
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 benefits
schoolchildren
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school children
 in various ways.People know about their
history
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 local
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.They can explain how people lived in the past and know how their ancestors lived in the past.As our ancestors told that without
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 will enhance the national pride
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 the children, which love their country more. .Most learners at early ages are not capable of connecting different historical events on the world stage, which could only be accomplished by those who are more grown-up. As many pedagogical studies have suggested, only students from secondary levels should learn main events throughout human
history
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 related to their country. In conclusion, I absolutely believe that
history
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 lessons delivered at school should be more about the past of the nation than that of the world.
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