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Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #trees #space #cities #towns #houses
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Recently, the importance of planting trees in open areas has been highly discussed in the
last
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 few years. At the same time, some people who disagree with
this
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 statement, claims that
people
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People
 should provide more housings in cities due to the high demand of working or living spaces. From my perspective, planting trees in the cities would bring more benefits to human
society
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
Society
 than building housings. As the development of human society, human beings create a lot of pollution
that is
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 detrimental to the environment. Planting trees can reduce a great amount of pollution and provide fresh air for people.
Although
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 the environmental issues are the inevitable result of social development, we
can not
can not
cannot
 ignore the consequences of making too much pollution on our planet. The
area
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 forests
has been disappearing
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have been disappearing
 rapidly in the
last
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 few decades. It is our responsibility to plant enough trees on our planet in order to have a sustainable ecosystem.
On the other hand
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, it is undeniable that people need more housings to work in the downtown
area
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.
For example
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, the financial service
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
such
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 as the Wall Street is fully occupied by different kinds of companies. Personally, I don't like the working environment around the Wall Street due to the lack of trees or nature. People need to have a work-life balance even if they are busy with making a living. At least, people need some outside places to stay and chat with friends in their spare time. Trees can create a large
area
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 of shade for people to relax during the summer time, which would be necessary for getting a work-life balance. As a conclusion, planting trees should be more important than building housings in the downtown
area
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. People should pay more attention to the environmental protection in order to provide a better planet for their future generations.
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  • green infrastructure
  • heat island effect
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