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Some people think it is more important to plant trees in open areas in towns and cities than to provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the importance of planting trees in open areas has been highly discussed in the
last
 few years. At the same time, some people who disagree with
this
 statement, claims that people should provide more housings in cities due to the high demand of working or living spaces. From my perspective, planting trees in the cities would bring more benefits to human society than building housings. As the development of human society, human beings create a lot of pollution
that is
 detrimental to the environment. Planting trees can reduce a great amount of pollution and provide fresh air for people.
Although
 the environmental issues are the inevitable result of social development, we
can not
can not
cannot
 ignore the consequences of making too much pollution on our planet. The area forests
has been disappearing
Suggestion
have been disappearing
 rapidly in the
last
 few decades. It is our responsibility to plant enough trees on our planet in order to have a sustainable ecosystem.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that people need more housings to work in the downtown area.
For example
, the financial service
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
such
 as the Wall Street is fully occupied by different kinds of companies. Personally, I don't like the working environment around the Wall Street due to the lack of trees or nature. People need to have a work-life balance even if they are busy with making a living. At least, people need some outside places to stay and chat with friends in their spare time. Trees can create a large area of shade for people to relax during the summer time, which would be necessary for getting a work-life balance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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