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Some People Think That Because Some Children Find Some Subjects Such As Mathematics And Philosophy Difficult They Ought To Be Optional Instead Of Compulsory. To What Extent Do You Agree?

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There is no denying the fact that subjects like mathematics and philosophy are difficult for many students.
However
,
this
 does not mean that they should be made optional. It is equally important for children to know the basics of each subject, whether it is difficult or easy. Subjects
such
 as mathematics cannot be ignored entirely because our day to day
life
 activities depend on mathematics, whether it is paying the yearly tax or buying something. If children do not learn basic concepts of mathematics,
then
 it will be difficult for children to cope up in professional
life
. They might feel ignored and less confident later on.
For instance
, children who studied in Hindi medium school due to financial issues often feel low in the future due to their lack of knowledge in English.
Also
, children
have growing
Suggestion
are growing
have grown
were growing
 age, and their preference keeps on changing when they grow up, and later on, they can develop their interest in difficult subjects. The same is true in the case of philosophy as well. It is not a subject that many students can digest.
However
, it offers a better perspective on
life
 and helps us to cope with the ups and downs of
life
. In my view, these problematic subjects should be made compulsory till
certain age
Suggestion
a certain age
 like till high school so that children are aware of the basics and later on children can choose amongst these subjects as per their career choices and preferences. To conclude, I strongly disagree with the view that subjects like mathematics and philosophy should be made optional because
such
 a decision will do students more harm than good.
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