In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main cause of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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I am writing to show my willingness to work in the head office in the United States of America for a couple of months due to several private reasons The trees that my wife works for an international hotel called tri town as a marketing manager and she will supposed to travel to the US

months for a few educational courses in fact I would like to be with my friends in

this

journey for about six months if things go according to plan due to the fact that my wife is very stressful in the majority of time and I think that

this

mission will be in three kids for her without me Actually one of my closest colleagues called Ali Rezza her IV in our department is very quick learner and

also

conscientious about everything and I have taught him lots of things which are related to my job since tomorrow is ago and I am pretty sure that he will be a good substitute

instead

of me in the situation what is more I can do some assignments through telephone or laptop in

this

. Even at weekends For

this

item I hope my request is

valued

well grounded in logic or truth or having legal force

valid

and logical enough to draw your attention and if you accept my requisition I will definitely work for our company without any on leave

this

year please

Accept comma addition

year, please

collaborate with me in

this

respect and save my application to the head office for assistance and

proceedings I look forward to receiving your response as quickly as

possible please

Accept comma addition

possible, please

let me know if you require any

further

information.

Submitted by Amir Hes on Thu Jun 11 2020

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

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267 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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judicial system
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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main cause of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Fully explain your ideas

ome children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think is a positive or negative develompent?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

How much time do you spend on watching news on Facebook? Do you think it is beneficial to do that?

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodworking should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family. To that extent do you agree or disagree?

Task 2 : Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages a higher level of violence in that society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?