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Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree?

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People should start eating a vegan diet because consuming non-vegetarian
food
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 can lead to serious health issues.
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 essay agrees that by eating
meat
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, people would invite some deadly diseases to their body.
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,
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 essay will discuss how it is against the law of nature and
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; it will discuss the harmful impacts on people's health. Humans should not slaughter animals for
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 while they have a myriad of
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nutrition
nutritional
 and natural
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 for their survival because it is opposed to nature ’s law.
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 to say that no one has the right to kill any creature for eating purposes because it leads to the extinction of these species.
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, in 2018, it's reported that more than 70 per cent of the world's threatened
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 species were killed for
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. As people
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are getting
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 addicted to non-vegetarian
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, they
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 succumbed by some severe ailments. Most of the animal
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fat
 have toxins and fatty acids which
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 hard to digest, especially red
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 causes countless diseases in humans like cancer, diabetes and fatty liver problems.
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, in a survey in the UK, it is found that people who are consuming a vegetarian diet are less likely to contract by these diseases and live longer than
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 consumers. In conclusion, by adopting the habit of eating natural or plant-based
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 lead to good health and can save the animals and other creatures from being killed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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