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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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Nowadays, working
experience
 is vital for every graduated
student especially
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student, especially
first
-graduated. In the competitive society, most of the companies not only focus on the results of academic, the more important thing that they look into is the personal
experience
 because there are various problems will be faced by their staffs. I believed students to work before their university study is better as they can link the content with their working
experience
 and have a better idea while preparing their final thesis. They can link the content in the class with the
experience
. During the tutorial, there are varieties of trending questions have been discussed, at that moment, students have more
experience
 always throw a lot of ideas and boost their performance. From the performance, professors or lecturers will be expressed by the performances and focus on you, and they will look forward to your growth. From here, students can hit the full mark for your participation mark. Working
experience
 can increase your personal confidence. While working, they had faced some difficulties or challenges, and these challenges will help them to move out from their comfort zone and improve their adaptation skill. When back to campus, they can share their personal
experience
 in their presentation. Lecturers hope students can link their work with personal
experience
 and score high mark from there.
Additionally
, they can contribute better ideas or abilities to their group assignments or presentations. Their contribution will express their group mates, and they will accept their ideas. All in all, working
experience
 is vital for every student. People are born as a blank paper, experiences are the colours that will be coloured on the paper and make your life be colourful. Working experiences always bring benefits for everyone, and grow everyone up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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