At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that
today in
some countries the proportion of young adults significantly higher than older people. As the result young generation has not seen their grandparents who can share the valuable life experience which is important for young adults. In my opinion the benefits of it often outweighs the drawbacks.
The role of elderly people in Accept comma addition
today, in
society
was
always essential because, they have been taught a precious knowledge for their generation. I think every Suggestion
had been
society
needs such
kind of people who can share their own experience. But nowadays the number of older people reduced considerably than past for several reasons. Consequently
, this
trend affects to society
in many ways
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ways, for
for example
, the crime rate rose, people forgot some traditions which they were learnt from their grandparents. Firstly
, among young people the crime rate rose and I think this
is the aspect of bad behavior
because some manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
families parent
busy with their work and they do not have older people to educate their children. Accept comma addition
families, parent
Secondly
, people are forgetting some traditions this
cause for losing their social identity in this
case the value of elderly people great
than adults.
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greater
By contrast
, the larger number of adults mean
the more power Suggestion
means
for
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in
society
. In reality, older people can not
can not
cannot
work and
they will become retired for their rest of life and if number of older people more than adults Accept comma addition
work, and
this
effects
the economy of have an effect upon
affects
country
because Suggestion
the country
a country
worker’s layer
is crucial for Suggestion
the worker’s layer
developing
. Suggestion
developers
Moreover
, almost all countries have demand for young, well-educated, active and diligent people. For example
, in Uzbekistan the ratio of adults more than older people so, the economy of this
country developing rapidly.
To conclude, of course older people play active role
in Suggestion
an active role
society
and it can not
be denied. can not
cannot
However
, I think the downsides of it often outweighs by adults and this
situation the advantages are greater than disadvantages
.Suggestion
the disadvantages
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