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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?

#parents #children #toys #child
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se which I have seen recently in a billboard and
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 a great opportunity for me to get acquainted with the skills which are 11 to my job in some occasions and in
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this
 way I can teach my colleagues after Actually I request to that please give me a loan in order to attend in the scores due to the fact that the costs of
this
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besides
 it can be practical for our company in terms of advertisement actually seeing various projects and so on what is more if you send my resume to
this
 education department it would be definitely advantages and impressive for the
next
 systems because there aren’t a lot of vacancies seats for applicants I have no opinion that after discourse I can work in advance level for our company and
also
 introduce our works to people and
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 customers through
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 issue can bring loads of profit for our company I look forward to receiving your response as quickly as possible due to finish a time
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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