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Genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. It should be limited. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that using genetic engineering in agriculture, medicine and transplantation is good solving in limited materials. But, I am not sure
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 that and I partly disagree with
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 idea and
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 of all, world health organisation and other respected communities understood meal problems across the globe. In African,
latin
relating to languages derived from Latin
Latin
 American and Asian countries having
undernutrition
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 problems. All of
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 followed by
bad cultivation
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the bad cultivation
 of
ground
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the ground
, not enough rain and not enough measure of
technic
of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill
technical
technique
. In my opinion,
one
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 of the
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ways
 to solve
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 problem would be genetic engineering.
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, with help genetic engineering in agriculture possible to find out new type of seeds for growing strong crops where rain
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is going
 hardly ever,
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 as decisions would be save
life
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the life
 of
African child
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an African child
African children
the African child
 and people.
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, from the other side genetic engineering is dangerous for natural products and could damage on
genetic code level
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the genetic code level
 of humanity. Manufactures of developed country use
genetic
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genetically
 modified vegetables in their
market places
the world of commercial activity where goods and services are bought and sold
marketplaces
 and want to get faith and higher incomes. But, no
one
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 tells us how
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 us vegetables influence for our
organisator
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 instance,
one
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 of the respectable news
agency
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agencies
 published article directed to GMV. Here was about Mars and kidder company products
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
 used
genetical
by genetic mechanisms
genetically
 modified
milk which
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milk, which
 dangerous for
health
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healthy
healthier
 children, In conclusion, I know that genetic engineering has
two side
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two, side
two sides
two sides sides
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 directed to quickly solve meal problems and another to medical need of in
pharmacy field
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the pharmacy field
. But I strongly believe that all of
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 must work only for developing our health and fighting with meal problem in poor countries.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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