In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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left a large proportion of people jobless, many individuals end up engaging in criminal act so as to meet up with their daily requirements. A research carried out by the Nigerian prisons authority showed that, 80% of the inmates sites lack of finance as their major reason for committing crime.↵↵↵
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, another school of thought r
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that illegal acts are borne out of an individual’s genetic make-up.
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, since the a child’s genetic structure is a combination of traits from both parents, if any of the parents partakes in
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illegitimate act there is about 99.9% possibility that their offspring will exhibit
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attributes because, it is already, embedded in congenital traits.
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, investigation into the life of Dereck Brew, a famous serial killer in New Zealand revealed that his father during his youthful age killed three of his ex-girlfriends,
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acts with feeling any iota of regret.↵↵↵In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that a p
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the poor financial state
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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