In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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ol I
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Lol, I
fuck myself to the point I do not see other girls. I hate
t
his motherfuckers.
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these motherfuckers
this motherfucker
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as
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Has
left a large proportion of people jobless, many individuals end up engaging in criminal act so as to meet up with their daily requirements. A research carried out by the Nigerian prisons authority showed that, 80% of the inmates sites lack of finance as their major reason for committing crime.↵↵↵
On the other hand
, another school of thought r
ecommend
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recommends
that illegal acts are borne out of an individual’s genetic make-up.
In other words
, since the a child’s genetic structure is a combination of traits from both parents, if any of the parents partakes in
such
illegitimate act there is about 99.9% possibility that their offspring will exhibit
such
attributes because, it is already, embedded in congenital traits.
For instance
, investigation into the life of Dereck Brew, a famous serial killer in New Zealand revealed that his father during his youthful age killed three of his ex-girlfriends,
hence
his ability to carry out
such
acts with feeling any iota of regret.↵↵↵In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that a p
eople's
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person's
immediate environment and p
oor financial state
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the poor financial state
contributes greatly to a p
ersons
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person's
violation of the law.
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