The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, the ministry of health in most of countries around the world, especially in advance one, is faced with
medical issues cause
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the medical issues cause
of obesity. Means that One of the best ways to reduce and control
this
problem focus to train some activity courses in school days for having
healthy mind
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a healthy mind
and
body
and
also
doing exercise convert to the routine
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
On
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In
the following I will give some justification why I completely agree with
this
opinion. One of the most obvious reasons to add extra sports and physical exercises in the
schooldays
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school days
are following of the reliable psychological theory which says that, healthy mind in a healthy
body
. Definitely, middle childhood and adolescence are perfect times of life to fit and produce
strong
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a strong body
body
for
rest
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the rest
of the life.
Therefore
,
school's department
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the school's department
as responsible for educating the
next
generation should focus more on physical education. Indeed, students will be able to
valuable
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valuate
human sources while they have knowledgeable and healthy
body
. Another postulate that the advocates like me would put forward about the habit. Clearly, by repeating an action regularly and consistently it
become
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becomes
part of your identity.
In other words
, every student with learning and practicing physical educations from primary schools to tertiary levels are capable to make an excellent habit for themselves to doing exercise in middle age and aging. Due to the fact that they never suffer diseases cause of overweight. In conclusion,
although
the number of people who eating too much and moving too little increase sharply, with
a
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an
accuracy and cohesiveness curriculum we are going to tackle
this
problem in the near future.
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