More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that raising the prices of fast food will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As a
consequences
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consequence
of developing technologies, our life becoming
esier
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easier
day bay day.
This
will lead to
increase
Suggestion
increased
numbers of people who have
problmes
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
with obesity. While there are some benefits of raising the prices of fast food, it would not be
best soultion
Suggestion
the best solution
best solution
of
this
problem and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
comletely
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
disagree with given statement and there are several reasons for my point. On the one
hand there
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hand, there
amount of solutions to
this
problem and they are more
benefitical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
.
Firstly
, training with sport is the best way of healthy
lifestlyle
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
lifestyles
. Take example, if people who
paticipate
share in something
participate
participated
participates
some sport, they do not have any
wroblems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
with obesity
and
Suggestion
And
would not be. So
,
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,
physical activities
improves
Suggestion
improve
our blood circulation system and they are very profitable for our muscles.
Secondly
, we need to increase the consumption of natural products
such
as
vegitables
edible seeds or roots or stems or leaves or bulbs or tubers or nonsweet fruits of any of numerous herbaceous plant
vegetables
, fruits and others. There a lot of vitamins and minerals in them which are essential for
humans
Suggestion
human
human's
body and helps to reduce
spere
refrain from harming
spare
spore
spares
weith
the vertical force exerted by a mass as a result of gravity
weight
with
.
Finally
, there are several solutions of
this
problem and we should to hard work on ourselves and try to run away from laziness.
On the other hand
, there
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
drowbacks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
drawback
of fast food.
Overconsumption
of
this
products
Suggestion
product
will
couse
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
cease
to deteriorate our health. For
examle
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, there many vitamins in
composition
Suggestion
the composition
of them
such
as
protains
any of a large group of nitrogenous organic compounds that are essential constituents of living cells; consist of polymers of amino acids; essential in the diet of animals for growth and for repair of tissues; can be obtained from meat and eggs and milk and legumes
proteins
protons
protein
lead to obesity.
That is
why
,
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,
we try to
do not
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do, not
eat them. In conclusion
,
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,
we should be careful to our health and try to train with sport.
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