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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Most of the
food
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 industries are using chemicals/ medicines for faster production and ensuring that
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food
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the food
 lasts longer.
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, there are concerns that these have harmful effects. In my opinion, the potential dangers of
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 are higher than the benefits we receive. One of the main benefits of using chemicals for preservation and production is that one can find all types of
food
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 in all seasons.
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also
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 helps people to carry packed
food
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 with them while
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
, hiking. Most of the airlines supply packed
food
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 to its passengers during long journeys. Another factor is that
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 has helped
food
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 industries to import and export
food
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 to other nations,
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 contributing to the economy of the country.
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,
instead
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 of the benefits, it has more harmful effects on the health of the people.
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 and foremost, these
chemical
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chemicals
 added
food
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 lacks sufficient nutrition levels, which is required by our body on a daily consumption basis.
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, these types of
food
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 are rich in sugar,
carbs
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 which causes health issues
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 as obesity, diabetes, and heart problems. These days children at a very young age have diabetes and other serious health problems because of the consumption of chemically prepared
food
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. To conclude, I firmly believe that consuming these types of
food
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 has a more severe effect rather than benefits. Preventive measures should be taken by the government to regulate the use of chemicals by
food
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 industries and I hope that organic products will become readily available at
reasonale
showing reason or sound judgment
reasonable
 prices to all
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