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Some people believe that in the near future there will be no borders between countries, while others feel that national borders will always remain. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some optimistic citizens have a desire and belief that one day our world will have no borders, but the truth be told
this
 dissolution of borders is highly unlikely.
Further
 describing both the viewpoints I believe that with so much hatred
this
 seems to be unrealistic. With the rising espionage, one
cant
can not
can't
 expect to create a favourable environment for our upcoming generations. Having a peaceful treaty amongst two neighbouring countries is improbable or simply impossible how can a numerous number of countries from different parts of the globe can have
same boundaries
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the same boundaries
.
Everyday
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Every day
 we read about reports regarding the Cold Wars going on in the worlds most powerful nations
such
 as India and Pakistan in matters of sharing borders and occupying each others
territories
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territory
, who come we can establish on a convenient deal and dream of United World.
Although
, having a singular nation can be quite beneficial chiefly in the matters of Globalisation and Financial status. Today because of the Globalisation and international trade
laws importing
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laws, importing
 and exporting basic amenities between different nations has been problematic. A United world will result in having abolishment of
such
 laws and availability of the products to the citizens at a reasonable price.
Moreover
,
besides
 economic enhancements we can even win the war
of
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on
 Global Warming. The great minds
from
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of
 various nations being it from today’s Enemy nations can unite together and gather the research regarding a solution for
this
 Global calamity. In my opinion, having a
common united
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common, united
 front can be quite helpful as there would be no
such
 international laws and our scientists wouldn’t have interference from the higher authorities and would be at the liberty of gaining access to important information anytime.
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