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Some people prefer to travel by car while others prefer to take the bicycle. Which of these do you prefer? What are the advantages and disadvantages of traveling by a car and a bicycle?

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Cars are the most convenient mode of transportation these days.
However
, despite
numerous benefits
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the numerous benefits
 that the cars provide, some people prefer bicycles. While I prefer
bicycle
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a bicycle
 for short distances, I
can not
can not
cannot
 ignore the luxury that cars provide for longer rides. A car is the most lovable transportation mode as they have numerous advantages. For one, cars are fast. It takes
short period
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a short period
 of time to reach somewhere.People can travel with their families or friends while enjoying the music sitting in the comfortable atmosphere inside a car, whatever is the weather outside: hot, sunny
,
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,
cold or rainy. Apart from all these
luxurious
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luxuries
benefits
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Benefits
, cars have many downsides, namely,
cost
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the cost
 of buying a car, fuel costs, pollution, traffic-jams etc.Car prices are skyrocketing these days leading to debt. Cars have become a necessity so many won’t refrain from borrowing money to buy their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 cars. Another downside is fuel costs. It leaves a huge hole in one’s pocket daily. Another big drawback is the major concern of
21st century
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the 21st century
, namely, ‘Pollution’. Studies have shown that automobiles are the biggest contributing factor in the rise of pollution.
On the other hand
, bicycles are Eco-friendly vehicles. It does not need any fuel to run so no air pollution. Bicycles are inexpensive to buy. On the contrast it saves money as to ride a bike requires physical exercise, one does not have to go to the gym to burn calories.
Bike
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The bike
 can do that for free.
However
, even bikes do not come without its own drawbacks. As riding requires physical exercise one can not go faster than one’s own strength. In
conclusion both
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conclusion, both
 have their own advantages and disadvantages. While bicycles are preferred to cover short distances in good weather conditions, cars are best to travel comfortably, luxuriously.
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