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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #companies #industry #move #areas #centers
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British pupils who can
communicate foreign
Suggestion
communicate in foreign
languages including
Accept comma addition
languages, including
 English at one of the educational institution of England between 2000 and 2010. In
generally
Suggestion
general
, for both years, the percentage of students who knew only German did not change.
Also
,
proportion
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the proportion
a proportion
 of those who were able to speak in Spanish were more than others. Turning to the details, it can be noted that students who can talk
two
in the direction of
to
 other languages ​​became 5 percent more in 2010 compared to 2000.
In addition
, those who studied other languages ​​
also
 rose by 5 percent over these decades.
However
, those who knew only French in 2010 decreased. As well as students who did not know other languages ​​
also
 decreased by as much as 10 percent.
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