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In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The two bar graphs below illustrate the rate of people using full driving licences in Great Britain by both
age
 and gender from 1975/76 to 2006
.
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 Overall, the men hold much more driving licences than the women in all parts of
age
 over
30
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a 30 year period
30 year period
year
 periods.
Moreover
, by the time, the number of licence holders in 2006
are
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is
 approximately higher than in 1975/1976. According to the
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, in the
year
 of 1975/1976
,
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,
the highest
propotion
the quotient obtained when the magnitude of a part is divided by the magnitude of the whole
proportion
proportions
 of the me who had the
samen
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
 driving licences at the
age
 of 30-39 which was 82
% while
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%, while
 the lowest
proportion
in
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of
 the same
year
 was between the
age
group
 of 17-20
,
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,
holding near about 38%
.
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.
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However, in
 the
year
 of 2006,50-59
age
group
 had the highest
proportion
 which was nearly about 90
% while
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%, while
 the lowest
proportion
in
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of
 the same
year
 was represented by the
age
group
 of again 17-20 had almost 38% in the
year
 of 2006.
On the other hand
,
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,
 in the
year
 of 1975 and 1976
,
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,
 the highest rate of women who had the same driving licence at the
age
group
 of 40-49 with almost 45
% while
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%, while
 the data shown in the same following
year
 the lowest percentage was between the
age
group
 of 70 years and above.
in
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In
 the
year
 of 2006 data shown that
,
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,
 again the highest
proportion
 who hold driving licence was the
age
 of 40-49 years
,
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,
 almost 80
%
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%, however
however
,
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,
 the lowest percentage was same for the
age
group
 of 70 years and above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Division of labor
  • Household chores
  • Work-life balance
  • Burnout
  • Efficiency
  • Workload distribution
  • Professional advancement
  • Gender roles
  • Cooperation
  • Mutual respect
  • Communication
  • Partnership
  • Stereotypes
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