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Most adults are not doing exercise.Some people think that showing sports events like olympics and world cup will encourage them to exercise. Others believe that some other methods can be used for it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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The represented bar chart depicts information about how much time was spent for phone calls by the residents of the UK, separated by local, national and international mobile types, beginning in 1995 and ending in 2002. Overall, it can be clearly seen that British men and women were approximately 73 billion calls within a country by fixed line at the beginning and remained the same at the end of the given period, while minutes of calls made by cell phone and from station to another country increased substantially. Looking
first
 at the calls made by digital phone, it can be accurately noticed that the overall amount of minutes made by British citizens was growing from year and year, and increased by eleven fold between 1995 and 2002.
Furthermore
, the number of minutes in billions of calls made for different countries were rising slightly, and already at the end of the period it has increased from 37 to 62 approximately.
However
, in comparison with cell contact and long-distance calls, calls made inside the country were remaining the same. The trends of the resident calls were increasing steadily from 71 to 86 throughout the three years.
In addition
, in the following 4 years the billions of minutes were declining slowly. The trends decreased from 86 to 71 and at the end of the period local dial calls returned back to the initial point
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