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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own country, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have different views about teaching national versus global
literature
 and
history
at
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in
 schools. Personally, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that it is crucial to gain a knowledge about native country
first
,
however
, having
general idea
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a general idea
 about the past of other nations, could possibly have some advantages. Learning the
literature
 and
history
 of a homeland is an indispensable part of education. Without a doubt, that information shapes the present culture and attitude.
Moreover
,
history
 knowledge gives
sence
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a sense
sense
senses
 of identity. On top of that,
process
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the process
a process
 of learning becomes easier, because, parents or grandparents may help their children, they can
also
 give insight into about different topics. For
examle
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
,
history
 books, usually, do not hold any detailed information, but somebody's grandmother or grandfather who saw the event, so they may
discribe
give a description of
describe
described
 everything,
as a result
, their youngsters will be more interested. Having a general idea about other
cultures'
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culture's
literature
 and
history
 may possibly help to cope with foreigners in the future. Due to present accessibility of travelling, people tend to visit other countries or work abroad, so there is a need to get along with native citizens. The best way is discussing some interesting or the most famous cases in their
history
 or the most well-known writers.
Furthermore
, that particular information will
also
 help in understanding of
specific relationship
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the specific relationship
a specific relationship
specific relationships
 between numerous countries.
For example
,
Russian governmant
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the Russian government
Russian government
 has
negative attitude
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a negative attitude
 towards the USA. After learning the past of each country, it is clear why exactly that has been happening. In conclusion, learning the
history
 and
literature
 of the own country defines the present and adults have a chance to help their children.
However
, knowledge about other countries has some pros.
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