Studies show that many people in the prison have low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree.

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The represented table below express the proportion of the population aged 65 and more in Canada, Germany and the UK from 1988 to 2000 with the projections for 2030.  Overall, there can be clearly noticed that the percentage of elderly people growing up every year in each country.
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, the
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two countries, Germany and Canada are showing a higher number in population than the UK.  Looking
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at the amount of old human beings in Germany, there can be seen that it was the most populated country with 20.45 % at the beginning and 25.32% after 12 years and with the projection for 2030 30.42 %, respectively.
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, the index of 65 years old and older human beings in Canada was 16.32 % in 1988 and the amount increased to 20.67 % throughout 12 years and
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with the prediction for given year 26.35 %. 
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, there can be noticed that the UK was the less populated country with elderly people  from the three given countries and with the percentage 14.23 it increased by 14.89 and predicted by 20.35 for the given years
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Rehabilitation programs
  • Reintegration into society
  • Reoffending rates
  • Life skills training
  • Educational attainment
  • Vocational training
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Inmate rehabilitation
  • Criminal behavior
  • Preventative measures
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