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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #interaction #people #society
Nowadays, people prefer communicating through social media to meet in person.
Although
 there are some drawbacks of using the sites, I believe that the benefits the technology have brought to our lives is undeniable.
Firstly
, the social networks provides us more convenience for information exchange and relationship maintenance, especially when long distance is a matter. Students studying abroad enable to keep in touch with their families and friends on a daily basis without paying fees. Social media is
also
 a powerful tool in marketing and business. In
this
 digital age, companies not only keep the clients updated regarding newly-release product, but attract the new customer by running their campaigns on several online platforms
such
 as Instagram, Facebook.
However
, using the social networking sites may backfire when the number of people relying on a virtual platform excessively increases. That situation can result in a decrease in the quality of interpersonal communication in society. Young people addicted to virtual lives keep alienating themselves from their parents, from the real world. The consequences of over-reliance on social media which the adolescence will have to suffer in the future, including lack of socialising skills and losing a sense of interaction. In brief, social media do harmful things to people when it is used wrongly and uncontrollably,
nevertheless
, it benefits greatly in a broad way of life.
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