IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet without any face-to-face contact with others. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

#world #shop #work #people #internet #contact #development
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Peoples are buying, working and communicating from the internet without seeing a person face-to-face is exactly popularly in these days. Those
kind
Use synonyms
 of activities of shopping, working, communicating from online
is seems
Suggestion
seems
 quite useful in
this
Linking Words
 quarantine days
also
Linking Words
.
Because as
Accept comma addition
Because, as
 you know there are happening corona virus outbreak. So every country of citizens are lockdown on their own house. For those
kind
Use synonyms
 of connection may happen some positive development or negative issues changes. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I will explain my opinions of both
side
Suggestion
sides
 of views with an example. The development of online services
make
Suggestion
makes
 employees and consumers to reduce the amount of spending time for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to their related places
such
Linking Words
 as shops, workplaces, etc. Peoples are using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 to make an online shopping for their
business
Use synonyms
. The positive
fact
Use synonyms
 about it is making a
costomers
Suggestion
customer
customers
customer's
 to save their time to go to the clothing shops for bargaining and buying. The negative
fact
Use synonyms
 is that products from the online shop can be a fake in reality like their quality and design are totally different from the one day uploaded to sell from the online. And, some peoples are doing
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
kind
Use synonyms
 of
business
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as online teaching, blogging, streaming to earn money from the peoples who get a service from them. So,
this
Linking Words
fact
Use synonyms
 is a
kind
Use synonyms
 of positive development because as you know fewer peoples on the streets will make the country to reduce pollution problems. The negative
fact
Use synonyms
 is that
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
unauthorize
not endowed with authority
unauthorized
unauthorised
business
Use synonyms
 from online can be fake to an
employees
Suggestion
employee
.
For example
Linking Words
, a
business
Use synonyms
 which cannot give an insurance policy to the employees before they get a job and a
business
Use synonyms
 which request a load of money from the employees for the entrance to their job. In the conclusion,
this
Linking Words
kind
Use synonyms
 of working, shopping and communicating from online should develop and carryout for saving time and reduce the pollution problem for
this
Linking Words
 modern society,.
Submitted by Lan Halder on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: