With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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I had the equal percentage of saturated fat and added sugar. In the recent decades, the medical technology has been enhanced.

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increased, and we can live more than in the past, joining much time with friends and family.

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, with these advantages, we

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issue and suggest solutions.

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of all, one of the problems is that we need more hospitals, health care building, doctors and nursing

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for increasing elderly people because they are vulnerable

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disease. To solve

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problem and take care of them, the

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more taxes. It means that an aging

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puts

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a huge burden

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young people to overcome lack of tax.

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has to find ways that they contribute to the

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, they can provide much knowledge to young people. As they have lived more and experienced many things than young people, they have much wisdom.

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give advice if some people are in a trouble.

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has to provide benefits about childbirth to

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deposit of caring child. If the birth rate is increased, the burden

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the youth will be decreased. To conclude, we live in an aging

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as the medical technology has been developed.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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