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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people think that nowadays using the Internet is very common and necessary, especially for children during school hours and teachers should
use
 it, while others believe that using too much Internet can lead to some problems for pupils.In my opinion the Internet is very useful for children in their process of learning and brings a lot of advantages but disadvantages too. We live in a century in continuous development and children are using computers for many purposes, to learn, for fun with computer games, to socialize, using
this
 kind of technology I can say that learning become faster and funny.Computers should be a tool in every kids home, in every kindergarten or school, children have to learn to
use
 it at a very early age.One of the reasons why I believe that the computer is very useful is that
this
 kind of device represents the future, is
use
Suggestion
used
 not only in schools, but in many areas like business, medical area, restaurants, hotels, that's why we have to learn our children to be used with
this
.Another positive reason is that using
this
 device the writing can become more facile and faster it is a real spend of time.
In addition
 to
this
, computers can be used for photo and video storage or to communicate with people from around the world.
On the other hand
, teenagers tend to become dependent on computers, they want to play all day and forgot to interact in real person and to do physical activities and
this
 can lead to isolation and obesity.Parents and teachers should be aware of children s behaviour and establish a schedule for
use
 of the computer.Another negative impact is that student type their essay or homework and forgot about the traditional writing. To conclude, I totally sustain the idea of introducing computers into schools, but at the same time we have to be careful and
use
 it with wisdom.
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