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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued whether so much money should be spent to repair old buildings or it is better to allocate them in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of building modern infrastructure. Even though modern buildings are more practical, I believe that the upkeep of
old architecture
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the old architecture
 is important for cultural heritage. One reason why maintenance of old buildings should be removed from a
city
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 budget is that many structures were built either after crises or during rapid development of a
city
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. Those buildings were constructed with cheap materials and poorly qualified
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
, with one purpose to satisfy the demand of low-cost and affordable constructions.
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, the
life-span
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifespan
 of those buildings is already ended, many of them can barely meet today's safety standards.
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, there are plenty of old buildings that survived through the centuries and hold the unique identity of the
city
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, which is impossible to replace. Despite that fact that modern facilities which are made from concrete and glass have spread across Moscow
city
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, the government managed to save the historical
city
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center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, which is an incredible piece of architecture. Not only old buildings play a significant role in a cultural identity of the
city
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, but they
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 attract a lot of tourists and local citizens who want to see a living history. In conclusion, not every single building deserves to be a part of the history, but some of them definitely should be saved for future generations. I'm convinced that the government should not keep a blind eye on historical constructions because they are part of history.
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