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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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In the modern world
every one
all people
everyone
is prefer
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is preferred
prefers
 to use the private
vehicles but
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vehicles, but
 few people have
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suggested
 that
,
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,
atlease
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at lease
 once in a month everyone should use public transportation.
In
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This essay will
this
 essay will cover the possible advantages and disadvantages of
this
 topic. In
this
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
 world
,
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,
first
 and foremost private vehicles
are become
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become
have become
 a symbol of standard of living and
also
 people have a great passion towards bike and car so they use automobiles without
think
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thinking
 about the consequences
.
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.
If everyone in the
societ
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
socket
 is ready to consider any public vehicle as a mode of transportation
atleast
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at least
 a day in a month will help to reduce the pollution in a minimal way because it will help to reduce our contribution of carbon monoxide to our environment.To avoid the
trafic
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
 conjunction on of the main street
,
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,
 all industries coming under Infopark is started common cab
fecilities
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
to
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for
 employees. Not only the pollution issue will
resolve but
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resolve, but
also
 can save money spend on fuel. Some contradictions have
this
 statement, during the tight working schedule
,
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,
 employees face difficulty
for
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in
of
 waiting for the common vehicle
since
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for
long time
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a long time
 and not able to reach on time.
another
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Another
 impact is that
,
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,
the limited transportation cannot meet the requirement of
general public
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the general public
 in
different way
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different ways
a different way
 like limited privacy and seating capacity. To conclude, every coin
have
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has
 two sides and
that is
 similar in
case
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the case
 of the public vehicles.
pros
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Pros
 and cons have same
weightage
the product of voltage and current
wattage
.
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