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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Fresh
water
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 is very important to live for the people around the world. The main
problem
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 of fresh
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 that it is not available for all them. So
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the number
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 of people grow up
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 is necessary for us. Let's say that Africa, there
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isn't
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water
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 not like fresh. There aren'
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 equipped with
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 supply.
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 is with money and poor. Even we live development country, not always
use
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 fresh
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, we
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water
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, which cleaned with chloride and it isn'
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 not healthy. I would like that government do something with it global ecological problems. It can
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deliver
 fresh
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 from the cities which located near the sea, river to the countries don'
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 have
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.
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, I live in the ecological city Kyzylorda. Near the city located Aral
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Sea, which
 don'
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 have
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, because people don'
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use
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 correctly and in the right direction. To not have
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a global problem
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 with
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, government must ban
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 the
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 simply. Maybe,
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the reason
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, but if people understand the importance of
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