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some people think it is better to rent an accommodation than own it. while others disagree saying that owning a property has many advantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Few people have faith in renting an accommodation but others think totally opposite of it and believes that owning a residence has its own advantages. I
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 agree with those who believes in owning a property. It is a sense of personal achievement for a person who invests in purchasing a home. Investing to buy a home is a permanent asset because day by day housing prices are increasing.
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, we can buy a house in today’s era and sale it in future with flying prices. One can generate an income from his own dwelling by renting it which helps him to pay monthly mortgages.
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, there is no risk of a sudden notice of evacuation. So, you can breathe freely. The biggest benefit of owning a mansion is that you can construct it the way you want. You can include the amenities according to your choice and enjoy it.
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, renting an
apartment
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 has its own benefits. If you rent a house or
apartment
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,
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 you do not need to pay a huge sum of money. Apartments or houses usually operated and maintained by managements and owners so there is no need to pay extra money for it.
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, you can get relief from paying property tax
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, you can change your residence, according to your job location and schools which saves your commute time. At
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, we do not need to worry about renovations if we are renting a house or an
apartment
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. All in all, I think that benefits of owning an equity overweigh the advantages of renting a property. Owning accommodation gives us a personal comfort and the feeling of happiness which we cannot get from
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apartment, we
 know that at the end it is not our personal belonging.
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